First of all, parents give us a chance to be born, then we continue drawing our life picture. They are always willing to help us when we have difficulties in our life. Teaching baby how to walk is quite hard because it takes patience. They always have to be beside us to observe our steps and support us when falling. It is dangerous if let a toddler walk without any instructors. Besides, it takes a long time to teach baby to speak and to talk as well. I think only parents can do that perfectly.
Secondly, parents also teach us to become a good citizen. They take care of us carefully even though we are already mature. When we make any mistakes, they can realize reasons immediately and help us to correct them. Especially, they can analyse our mistakes and show us what is right, what is wrong, what can be done or what can not. They try to be good examples for us to follow.
We have many good friends, teachers but there is no one really understand us better than parents do. When we feel sad or happy, the people who we want to share our feelings with firstly are our parents. They always stand behind us when we have success or failure in life. Of course, they want to do the best for us.
In conclusion, parents are very important in children’s education. They have taught us from the first lesson to many things in life with all their love and caring. We all have behaviors or hobbies that we learnt from our parents. Thanks for all the things which they do for us.
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Bài viết được score: 7 cùng với comment: It's a good paper.
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Our parents are always beside us any time since we were born. They teach us how to walk, to speak and to have good behaviors, so we have enough confidence to reach the real world. Nobody can understand us better than our parents do. Therefore, I believe parents are the best teachers.
First of all, parents give us a chance to be born, then we continue drawing our life picture. They are always willing to help us when we have difficulties in our life. Teaching a baby how to walk is quite hard because it takes patience. They always have to be beside us to observe our steps and support us when we are falling. It is dangerous to let a toddler walk without any instructors. Besides, it takes a long time to teach a baby to speak and to talk as well. I think only parents can do that perfectly.
Secondly, parents also teach us to become a good citizen. They take care of us carefully even though we are already mature. When we make any mistakes, they can realize reasons immediately and help us to correct them. Especially, they can analyse our mistakes and show us what is right, what is wrong, what can be done or what can not. They try to be good examples for us to follow.
We have many good friends, teachers but no one really understands us better than parents do. When we feel sad or happy, the people who we want to first share our feelings with are our parents. They always stand behind us whenever we are succeed or fail in life. Of course, they want to do the best for us.
In conclusion, parents are very important in children’s education. They have taught us from the first lesson to many things in life with all their love and caring. We all have behaviors or hobbies that we learnt from our parents. Thanks for all the things which they do for us.
Bài viết được score: 7 cùng với comment: It's a good paper.
Bài sửa lại:
Our parents are always beside us any time since we were born. They teach us how to walk, to speak and to have good behaviors, so we have enough confidence to reach the real world. Nobody can understand us better than our parents do. Therefore, I believe parents are the best teachers.
First of all, parents give us a chance to be born, then we continue drawing our life picture. They are always willing to help us when we have difficulties in our life. Teaching a baby how to walk is quite hard because it takes patience. They always have to be beside us to observe our steps and support us when we are falling. It is dangerous to let a toddler walk without any instructors. Besides, it takes a long time to teach a baby to speak and to talk as well. I think only parents can do that perfectly.
Secondly, parents also teach us to become a good citizen. They take care of us carefully even though we are already mature. When we make any mistakes, they can realize reasons immediately and help us to correct them. Especially, they can analyse our mistakes and show us what is right, what is wrong, what can be done or what can not. They try to be good examples for us to follow.
We have many good friends, teachers but no one really understands us better than parents do. When we feel sad or happy, the people who we want to first share our feelings with are our parents. They always stand behind us whenever we are succeed or fail in life. Of course, they want to do the best for us.
In conclusion, parents are very important in children’s education. They have taught us from the first lesson to many things in life with all their love and caring. We all have behaviors or hobbies that we learnt from our parents. Thanks for all the things which they do for us.
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